Hello Chiren!
Gatha around, fa de story of de lollipops. I'm gan' tell ya 'bout de lollipop field in Candyland.
Once upon a time, dere was a little boy, bout your age, da lu'da candy, all type a candy.
Er'day walkin' to school, de lil boy would pass a field fill wit candy an' a gran' lollipop tree. Na dis tree wa' so big dat it could be seen miles awhey. Each time, dere seem to be more an' more lollipops on de tree.
One day, de little boy wanted a candy so bad that he went to go get it. But to his su'prise, dere was a guard. Although this guard couldn't read not one word, he took his job v'ry serious.
The liddle boy, bein' turn down, went to school, but n'eh stop thinkin' bout a way to get de candy from da tree.
De next day, de boy brought a telegram dat say de guard 'pose to let him get all de lollipops he wan' to eat. The guard, to the boy surprised, say "Ya, you go get all da lollipop you wan' yun'man!"
De lil boy, although surprised, started to get all the candy he wan. But lil did he know, de tree was made to catch de little kids dat try to trick de guard.
As de lil boy climb de tree, de guard started to laugh because he knew what was going to happen.
Wit each climb, de lil boy ate a lollipop, and once he got to the top, he was too sticky to get back down de tree, and de tree began to engulf de boy.
He hollered down at de guard say, "Le'me dahwn nah!"
The guard acted as though he didn't hear the lil boy, and the boy spent the rest of his childhood in dis tree.
The next week, anahda lil boy walk past de tree an wan the lollipops. He could'n believe how many lollipops were on de tree! "Gee, I really wan de candy! I gotta get it!"
Wit'out known de truth about de tree, de little boy went to de guard and say he supposed to eat de lollipops.
With a suspicious smile, the guard say "ya lil boy, get you some lollipops from da tree!"
The boy start climb de tree, an eat all de lollipops. When he got to de top, he wa too sticky to get down. When he look to his left, he see his classmate, stuck in the tree, green from all da lollipops he ate.
De boys talk to each other and find out that they would be stuck dere forever. Each of de lollipops in de tree were kids that over time, changed colors, and eventually transformed into lollipops.
Author's Note:
This story was based upon the story of the The Gub-Gub Peas by Martha Warren Beckwith (1924), where the main character tricked the guard of the peanut tree into letting him eat all of the peanuts that he wanted. Once the owner of the peanut farm found out that this person was eating the peanuts, he told the guard to hold him there so that he could get punished for stealing the peanuts. I tied this concept in with the thought of one of my favorite childhood games, Candyland! In the game of Candyland, the game is a forrest of candy. With those two things combined, this is how the De Tale A'Da Lollipops came about.
Very unique story! It fits in well with your blog theme. I did find it a bit difficult to read at part. Due to the language or voice you were using. I wasn't appose to it though. It really adds character. I have read one of your stories before and again I was pleased. I think you do a great job of adding character and detail to your stories!
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Great story! Like the comment above, I also had a little difficulty reading it but it was a good story line. I read a story this week that was told in this type of language but it was ten times harder to read than your story. I think its such a different style of writing that not everybody is used to so thats why it is difficult to read. But props to you for doing a really good job in telling your story in this type of language... that takes a lot of work and thought in my opinion!
ReplyDeleteThis is such a cool story I loved it! I thought it was so different how you changed the dialect of the entire story. It made it harder to read but at the same time it kept me focused on what was going on in the story because it slowed by reading down! Candyland was also one of my favorite games growing up as well so I love how you changed the peanut tree into a lollipop one. Keep up the great work!
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